The theme we had to write about was "If I won two million euros, I would...".
His comment: The idea of the essay is to make you use 'if' clauses - if I won I would . . . You have not done this.
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If she won two million euros, what would she… buy, treat herself to? Would she travel around the world? Why not? She had always tried to see as many countries as she could, considering her relatively low finances, of course. However, she would visit only the European countries, Australia, the USA, and perhaps a few countries of South America. Yes, she would avoid too exotic places, for she loved comfort very much. Comfort does not necessarily mean fancy!
She would travel around the world, meet people, and try not to kill them – ha-ha – or, let herself be killed.
She adored black humour.
For the world trip, she would need to buy new clothes and other little things: leather jackets, leather bags, leather rucksacks, leather boots and shoes, leather whatever – and hide from the ‘green’ and animal rights activists.
She could buy a new Hi-Fi system as the old one broke down months ago.
She could leave her job and do things she’d always yearned to do. For example, she could finally learn the art of gardening; lose herself among plants, bushes and rocks, she - invisible to the outside world.
She could study, not caring too much about the school fees, or not having enough time.
If she were smart, she would buy a flat or two, even more, and rent them. She would then have a regular income.
Would she tell someone she won? No, she would not. It wouldn’t be wise. Many jackpot winners ended badly. They lost family and friends. In the end, they had to say good-bye to the prize, too.
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My essay
Date: 2009-04-03 02:55 pm (UTC)His comment: The idea of the essay is to make you use 'if' clauses - if I won I would . . . You have not done this.
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If she won two million euros, what would she… buy, treat herself to? Would she travel around the world? Why not? She had always tried to see as many countries as she could, considering her relatively low finances, of course. However, she would visit only the European countries, Australia, the USA, and perhaps a few countries of South America. Yes, she would avoid too exotic places, for she loved comfort very much. Comfort does not necessarily mean fancy!
She would travel around the world, meet people, and try not to kill them – ha-ha – or, let herself be killed.
She adored black humour.
For the world trip, she would need to buy new clothes and other little things: leather jackets, leather bags, leather rucksacks, leather boots and shoes, leather whatever – and hide from the ‘green’ and animal rights activists.
She could buy a new Hi-Fi system as the old one broke down months ago.
She could leave her job and do things she’d always yearned to do. For example, she could finally learn the art of gardening; lose herself among plants, bushes and rocks, she - invisible to the outside world.
She could study, not caring too much about the school fees, or not having enough time.
If she were smart, she would buy a flat or two, even more, and rent them. She would then have a regular income.
Would she tell someone she won? No, she would not. It wouldn’t be wise. Many jackpot winners ended badly. They lost family and friends. In the end, they had to say good-bye to the prize, too.